Blue is the colour of the vast skies,
The colour that colours silent sighs…
Blue of the gems, and blue of the eyes,
Blue is the colour when the body dies…
…blue is the colour when the body dies…
…when the body dies…
…blue is the colour…
There, she laid along the road-side,
Palms up-turned, lips parched and dried,
Flies humming, howering over eyes,
As inch-by-inch she diminished in size…
…inch-by-inch she diminished in size…
…diminished in size…
…inch-by-inch…
And the blues then turned black and brown,
With the wounds that emerged dust crowned…
A few souls die with the body’s crimes…
A few when die, die several times…
…A few when die, die several times…
…several times…
…few souls die…
~And the traffic moved... unmoved... in a procession~
81 comments:
Oh boy! this is some template!! wow, looks awesome!
I really really like the style of this poem...the way the words disappear...
Blue for me is the color of my madness on the white ;)
N
wow! that was wonderful!
Rhyming as well! I love it! Splendid!
**drooling**
U never told me that u updated ur blog! X(
:(
peace & love
Jeevy
its a cool icy blue ...
the words mind blowing ...........
really touching !
What made you think that ?
The template is too good and blog rocks as usual :)
@Nothingman: Thangs Nothingman :-) Yeah the sight had a lasting effect in my mind and the sounds still echo... so re-produced that trailing effect it in writing.
Thanks to jeevy for the template. :-)
@Rajeev: thanku thanku. Arre I posted it last evening only.... how could I have told you? :-)
@blue ink: Absolutely! who will know the shades of blue better than you? ;-)
Thanks a ton. :-)
@Aks: Thanks dear. :-)
Hmmm day before, when I was getting back home in the evening, saw a lady lying on the road. I just went ahead, but guilt twitched in my tummy and I came back only to find her dead. Called up municipality, tried tracing her husband etc etc... That episode was kind of too heavy, so just wrote about it. :-)
the earth's spawn, to the earth it belongs...
a minute of silence, in this silent song...
grey is the colour of the infant dawn...
life moves on, on and on...
@ humbl: :-)
What is born, shall one day die,
be it the grey or the orange sky.
An infant now, a youth tomorrow,
senility then, the eternal sorrow.
What is gone, is bye and gone,
No regrets, for life moves on...
...on and on... as you say.
There people in the office abhi bhi, or else i would have stood up to clap.
1. This has a fabulous structure!
2. It is macabre, which i love!
3. Really graphic, i can see it.
4. Makes me think, ki hua kya hoga?
Awesome Meenakshi!
@aakash!!!: wow thanku thanku. :D I am really honoured. :-)
Kya hua woh toh pata nahi... bas itna sochti hoon ki bhagwan aisi maut kisi ko naa de.
Blue... what does blue signify?
Blue... blue and colours.
I am hypnotised and disaffected by colours.
What am I?
Confused and diminishing.
Mesmerising poem. I don't have a substitute for that word.
***
Is it now? I don't know..
If I ever saw a revamp... it was this one...
NIce Lines Dear....
Keep it up
The rain soaks the earth
washing
cleansing
enabling growth to occur.
Tears are the rain of the soul.
cooling
cleansing
enabling the soul to heal
. . . thus grow.
A thing of beauty is a joy for ever:
Its lovliness increases; it will never
Pass into nothingness; but still will keep
A bower quiet for us, and a sleep
Full of sweet dreams, and health, and quiet breathing.
I am thankful to God that still we have some sensitive beings around.
It was not too difficult to guess the episode...glad to know ya
@Kazarelth: hahahaha... you are confused right now... that I could see. :D
and thanks. :-)
@Mukul Agarwal: Thanks Mukul. Visited your blog. Nice poems you have there. :-) Keep writing! Cheers!
@anonymous 1: Ok now anon, you are very sweet. And a great poet at that.
I would love to know you more, read your works and atleast know you by a name, even if pseudo :-(
@anonymous 2: Though I think you are the same anon as above, I would still tell you (just in case, u are not)... the poem is beautiful, dreamy and wishful. Nice. :-) And leave a name... plz plz plz... :-)
@Aks: You are embarrassing me now. :-)
Where are you these days? US? Remember having read something of the kind at Sushant's blog. Still with the same company?
Cheers everyone. Be good! be happy!
Meenakshi
ud ud ud ud huli huli huli
an ugly event described beautifully
...described beautifully
...an ugly event
sorry had to do that ud huli to bring the rhyming
This is an amazing template I've seen recently.. Really amazing..
And I like the style of poem.. Pouring your emotions perfectly..
1. Absolutely top notch stuff, even though its so completely tragic.
2. I lovvvve what you have done to the blog, the older one was cluttered.
3. Nice to see you back in action.
a great comeback
is this any kinda spell u do..
with....blue ;)
ahaa...much better...
:)
@Sushant: hahahahaha @ ud ud ud huli huli huli. hahahahaha thanku thanku. :-)
@dinesh: Thanks Dinesh. and Welcome here. :-)
@ajit:
1. Thanks for appreciating the poem and yeah it was quite tragic.
2. The older one was cluttered? My blog was cluttered? booohooo:(:(:( hehehehe... yeah I know. thanks :-)
3. yep.... completely action packed... secure your seat belts now! ;-)
@dreamcatcher: hehehehe abra ka dabra... blue lue lulu... ok u got my spell? ;-) hehehehehe thanks dream. :-)
@humbl: naaaah not better than what you wrote here and in the previous post... you are quite spontaneous. love that. :-)
naa.... I was not embarassing u, rather I was embracing the fact that I know u from here.
Yeah I am in US on short trip n after that will go back to Gurgaon ...close to family...pray for me. I dont wanna do "Jana tha Japan pahunch gaye Chin samajh gaye na "
:)
Dear Meenakshi,
U hv got god gift to write...keep writting such type of cute and beautiful articles.....
And the traffic moved...unmoved..in a procession.
Loved this line
Hey check out my blog now!
U have a reward to collect.
peace & love
Jeevy
that was amazing...u own a great place to be proud of...
beautifully written..
and yr template is just awesome :P
sharad
i didnt know about this...the distance has actually created gaps...hope you are out of it now...take care...
I love you template its quite sexy
@aks: :-) inshallah aap jaldi aaoge Gurgaon. :-)
@Quality Tale: Thanks Tale and welcome here. :-)
@Rishabh: Hey Rishabh, thanks. Visited your blog and commented. Your poems are awesome... straight from the heart... full in feeling. Keep visiting! Cheers! :-)
@rajeev: Thanks Jeevy Iam honoured to recieve the (re)award. :-)
@Jeya anand: Hey thanks Jey. :-)
@sharad mathur: Thanku thanku :-)
@anonymous: Yeah... we often sit at the cracks dangling our feet between the gaps and its then that we realize how much the distances have grown.... hahahahaha... I am out of everything now. Thanks and you take care too. :-)
@andrew: Hey Andrew, is that "You" a typo, or are you addressing my template directly? ;-)
hahahaha thanks and welcome here. :-)
oh wow...really beautiful. sounds so 'silent' yet very moving. loved it.
the template is awesome too!
I come back to your site and then I think, "wait did I type in the wrong url" ;-) Amazing template and equally enchanting poem.... macabre !!!
WOW :D
"A few souls die with the body’s crimes…
A few when die, die several times…"
still resonating in my mind...
Oh..Amazin..
Really good stuff..i mean truly touching..
Btw luvvvvvvvverly eyes...
In the template I mean :p
moti i will take care...but i hate you for not telling me about this...tu ghoomti rehti hai yahan wahan...n u dont even bother to call...beta abhi ye haal hai...meri shadi ke baad kya karegi...n btw...cant login to gmail so writing on ur blog...
Beautiful..and its quite graphic...loved it..couldn't help but notice the template is blue.. just like the poem..
too much .....
too heavey to just deal with it...
koi kadar nahin hai na is sharir ki agar praan na hon toh....
Hi
My URL has now changed to
http://milliondollarexpressions.blogspot.com/
Superunknown
nice blog!!! blog rolled!!
beautiful poem...way to go !!
i've seen d color blue from a different angle here..the gloomy side to it though its my fav color n i've always associated it wid freshness
I loved the poem. The faded blue background pic made it all the more poignant.
"And the blues then turned black and brown,
With the wounds that emerged dust crowned…
A few souls die with the body’s crimes…
A few when die, die several times…
…A few when die, die several times…
…several times…
…few souls die…
~And the traffic moved... unmoved... in a procession~"
Really nice.
Take care, and bye...
great yaar! beautiful blog....hats off madam
i want to talk to u please pick the call...its urgent
minakshi,
first a hug cause i missed you. sounds strange writing this comment to a blogmate but really did miss you girl.
i don't really have anything much to say about the poem since everyone who has commented here before me has summed up how great it is. but unlike them all , i actually thought the poem was about me. guess i got a bit drowned in these words and my life. was seeing my own reflection in those eyes for a moment back there.
do keep writing. you words keep a lot of us going.
hey...thats one the best poems ive ever read...awesome..
love ur template..
linked ya to keep reading the good stuff!
Beautiful again..
n I just love the new template!
Greatttttttt!
And waiting for yer post Gal...
post in!
Sorry people... I was not in town, hence the delay in revertal. :-)
@harshad: Thanks! and where have you been? long time. :-)
@Vibhanshu: Yeah I know... that rust colour had become my identity in ways... ;-)
Thanks a ton for the poem and template. And yes the eyes are very pretty...unfortunately, not mine. :( hehehehehe
@hazaron khwahishein aisi: Thanks Miraj. :-)
@anonymous: Honestly, I was not sure it was u... andhere mein teer chalaya tha. :P
@SS: hahahaha... yeah, you said it. I was wondering why noone said that... though a pure coincidence, it fits well. :-)
@Puneet: hmmmm heavy toh hai bhai... aur sahi mein shareer bina praaan, jaise teer bina kamaan? ;-)
@Superunknown: Noted Sir!
@Neo: Thank You! honoured! :-)
@Lavender: Yeah Blue is often associated with gloom, but thinking of the colour of the sky as blue when it is clear, it does stand for freshness too. Thanks :-)
@Aruni rc: Thanks a lot Aruni. You take care too. And Yeah write more often. :-)
@Jyoti: thanku thanku. :-)
@Ravali: Thanks a lot dear. I feel really good reading your comment. :-) Feels good to think that you are missed, because it says you are loved. :-)
And khuda na khaasta... apne aapko mat dekho is manzar mein... Inshallah humari Ravali bahut hi zinda dil, zindagi se bhari hai. Lots of love! :-)
@Nisha Punjabi: Hello Nisha. Thanks a lot for appreciating my work. Will look forward to your visits. :-)
@Standbymind: Thanks Aman. yeah will update soon. :-)
Cheers! everybody. Have fun. And thanks a lot for visiting Kshanik Insaan and commenting here. Love you all! :-)
A wonderful piece of poetry.
I like your impressive profle.Good luck.
nice template! really! and ya a good poem, as always..
first:
relle nice template
secondly: the poem was brillian the way blue was constantly being spilled thru the words it gave a ethereal feel to the whole work
brilliant
Hey post something good. I am depressed :'( Finally....
@Surjit: Thank You Surjit. I am honoured and humbled. :-)
@Solitary reaper: Hey reaper good to see you here. :-) and Thank you. :-) hugz!
@Shamash: Thank you. :-) How have u been? No clips yet of the movie?
@Vibhanshu: hahahahhaa... did I manage that again? To depress you? I was wondering how u didnt say anything about the sad content this time around. hehehehhe...
Next one will be happy. I promise. solemn! :-)
wow...
this blog is simply beautiful...amazing background.
and wonderful poems to go with it.
I love the Creating Nirjhira- part 1 post... the very idea of a conversation taking place between a man and the moon...bit funny and quite creative..
@hershey desai: Thanks hershey :-) welcome here.
And Nirjhira happens to be my favourite too... I only hope I am able to take the story further. :-)
Keep visiting. Cheers!
Meenakshi
"a few when die, die several times.." beautiful!
long time.. kithhe gayab ho gayi si?
ps:pardon me for my hindi :)
@matangi: Hello... and thanks a ton. :-)
@SS: Main saadi Dilli gayi si... te utthe internet da access nahi si... aiddan karke main blog which irregular si. Tussi dasso... ki chal reha hai?
ps. Not Hindi, what You have written here is Punjabi. :-)
ye gumshuda kis firak mein ho ...long time no post...:)
toh itthe baat si...tussi dilli se wapas aa gaye..chalo ab jaldi jaldi post karo fir :)
ps: paradon me for my punjabi :)
wow !!!!
write more often !!
yaa it sure iss good.. very good infact....
butt i must say it paints a very depressing picture of the female who lost her life....
64 comments...i'm jealous Meenakshi ji...how do you do it??
:P
N
aur kitna intezaar karna padega /....naye blog entry ke liye....
u have become busy or lazy these days :-)
wow impressive piece of work. will b back to read more...
Vaaapas aayien Na!!!
awesome blog.. u gave me goosbumps..
enchanting template..
blogrolling you..
@dream catcher: Firak mein hoon ki kuch toh strike ho... koi kahani, koi daastan... kuch bhi jise main likh sakoon. Magar afsos. :-)
@ss: Hanji aih baat si. hanji post kar didnde hain... thodi taan sabar karo. :-)
@Neo Amaan: Thanks Amaan. Will try to. :-)
@devil's paradise: Thanks. and depressing it is... anything like that cannot be otherwise. :-)
@Nothingman: Jealous of me? You must be kidding buddy. You are one of the most wanted bloggers around.
@Puneet: :( pata nahi. Busy sounds better to the ears and the ego. But kya karen haqueeqat kuch aur hi hai... aur woh kadwa sach yeh hai ki I have become lazy. :-)
@Celestine: Thanks Celestine. You are most welcome. :-)
@Standbymind: Bahut jaldi... Intezar ki ghadiya samaapt hongi... humein aasha hai. :-)
@Ankit: Thanks Ankit. :-)
hey I've given u an award! :)
Visit my blog now
peace & love
Jeevy
Swagat hain Apka!!!
Wb :)
That piece was just Great!!
Nice creation.. you seem to have a big fan following. Will keep coming .. if you promise more like this. :)
its blueeeeee!!!!!
and beautiful.
loved it. I'ma go thru the entire blog this week.
I'm loving it :D
@rajeev: Thank You Jeevy. :-) I am honoured. :-)
@Standbymind: Shukriya Aman sahab... swagat aur prashansa dono ke liye. :-)
@raazmataaz: Oh no thats not a fan following... those are all fellow bloggers with whom I have been fortunate enough to meet here and share a unique relationship with each one of them. :-)
I promise you, you will find something here occasionally... sometimes good, sometimes bad... but yes always a hearty welcome :-)
@acid tongue: thanks buddy. Please do... I am honoured. :-)
Cheers all of you. :-)
Meenakshi
Kuch aage bhi likhengi madaam?
@aakash!!!: Likhna toh hai... but kya karoon kuch soojh hi nahi raha. I am so blank and a little too cheerful these days... :(
Is this fair that you write only ven you are low.. Im sure writing helps in those times to let your sadness flow out in words. But equally enuf you may allow the happiness to gush over this space of yours.
To suggest you may write something abt world harmony and one religion concept... peace and prosperity basically. Only if you deal with such obtruse topics.
Can I take the liberty of calling ya back ? Com'on lady, you have been much into your Zone for long now and you need to break out of it. There are some honestly missing ya....ya aapka blog comments se hi vartalap karne ka uddeshya reh gaya hai... better catch you on chat :)
as usual, power packed and very good work .
Especially the ending is thought-provoking.
:)
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