Monday, April 2, 2007

Creating Nirjhira- part 1

It was a bright starlit night.
The queen of the sky, in her crescent chariot, bedecked in the grandeur of white brilliance, presided over the revelry of the night. She smiled graciously at the performance of her ardent admirers, the prim and prop, well dressed, knights of the night, who well portrayed their skills at the art of chivalry, to amuse the queen.

While this act was brewing up in the heavens, on the surface of earth sat a solitary soul by his window… romancing with the cool breeze, wearing a smile indicative of his lost countenance… a silent spectator to the night’s frolics. The very image of a man, freshly struck by Cupid’s arrows… gazing at the moon, possibly summoning in his mind, lines from love sonnets of Sidney and Spenser… comparing his beloved with the moon. By his window he sat, lost in recollecting every moment of that evening when he had met her. And like all those romantic, passionate hearts that believe in “Love at first sight”, our dear young friend, lost his heart to this beautiful maiden at the party. Just like the hero of all classic love stories, every night, he stares at the moon, like it was a mirror reflecting his thoughts in images, and in that image, he sees his beloved’s face. Thus the queen of the sky once again became the patron of yet another pair of lovers.

Today, in an especially gracious disposition, she dismisses her court early and sits in solitude with the lover, both admiring in verbal abundance, the object of his passionate love. But our hero is still a rational lover… now does that sound like an oxymoron? Can love and rationale go together? Well I say so, because this gentleman, our hero, warrants moderation in praise for his lady. See what he tells the moon…


No… not so high…
Let her be firmly grounded,
for she fears to fly.

No… not so deep…
Let her be seen as shallow,
than plunge in fair conceit.

Oh! not even so fair…
She’s but the colour of dusk,
Dark nights form her hair.
Her eyes are not coral blue,
But a dark brown affair.

Her temperance?
How do I tell you what it be,
Sometimes, a dormant volcano,
Sometimes, a tempestuous sea.

If coquetry be a maid’s weapon,
She has brandished none,
And yet against her natural charms,
All men and deities summon.

If women feign innocence,
To win the hearts of men,
She feigns a fake cunning,
I know not to what gain?

Timidity, fragility and subservience
Are traits to her unknown.
She possesses a tender heart,
With a mind of her own.

She is not a noted beauty,
Nor has any craft conjured…
In her strength and vulnerability
I find my heart conquered.

25 comments:

soulitary reaper said...

very nice....really i loved it:)...
last few nights have been moonlit, were lukin lovely -the blore sky... did that inspire ya?:)

AakASH!!! said...

I have read poems written by others, and i have read poems written by me, and i have read poems written by you. I am not saying that you outshadow everything that i have ever read, and i am not saying that you have reached the acme of your efforts. But this seems so fresh, it is that first whiff of rain on the mud, it is the last drop of dew, before everything evaporates. It is so good, that even before finishing it, i have to write this. And now i shall go back to completing it.

Kudos Meenakshi!

Winged Fantasy said...

@Kavita: I actually wrote this about ten days back. I had a story in mind and I wanted to write it in a way... something like verse-drama. I mean not with any strict rules, but all characters talking in poetry and only the narrator talking in prose. But then... somehow it just faded away and I can't write any further... atleast not for sometime. So I posted it incomplete as it is. :-)
Yes Bangalore sky is beautiful these days. And the setting was conceived as I walked on the terrace gazing at the clear sky :-)

@aakash!!!: :-))) thank you. That was sweet... very sweet. Thanks for the encouragement. Coming from you Aakash, it means a lot. :-)

Aruni RC said...

Yes, 'fresh' best describes this poem of yours. The idea of a rationalist in love, and his moderation in praising his beloved - refreshingly original themes.

Prince K. said...

Aye. We all are conquered by this unfathomable, yet rational beauty aren't we?

We are all captured and held by such things.
Insignificantly held.
Bah. I am in a very weird state after reading this...
Forgive me!

Winged Fantasy said...

@aruni rc: Thanks aruni :-).

@Kazarelth: You know what Kazarelth? whatever is said is the perception of the lover. We make out objects to be unfathomable... while they stand in front of us in all simplicity. All you need to do is be honest and straightforward ... thats all.

Forgiveness is too big a word. I muse with you on the weirdness of your state. :-)

Cheers!
Meenakshi

aas said...

Haven't gone through all of your blog as yet, but I absolutely love the few posts that I have managed to read. I have been reading, and thinking : 'now why did I not stumble upon this blog in all my days of blogging and reading blogs'?

Thank you I must, for sharing your poem. The readers of my blog have been sharing their experiences and memories and this sharing has come to mean a lot to me.

However, I do hope you are wrong about everything fading away into oblivion with time. I do hope that somewhere, something of everything remains.

aas said...

Haven't gone through all of your blog as yet, but I absolutely love the few posts that I have managed to read. I have been reading, and thinking : 'now why did I not stumble upon this blog in all my days of blogging and reading blogs'?

Thank you I must, for sharing your poem. The readers of my blog have been sharing their experiences and memories and this sharing has come to mean a lot to me.

However, I do hope you are wrong about everything fading away into oblivion with time. I do hope that somewhere, something of everything remains.

Sandeep said...

nice yaar.....i like the way of presenting the emotions very much...refreshing

Prince K. said...

Um. Yes. Perception of who-was-once-a-lover.
For now, I am just (as they say) a 'hopeless romantic'.

And, yes. You are right. I do feel everything is different and barely understandable.

AakASH!!! said...

Dont humble me Meenakshi. Its not kind to do that to someone who cant write these days. =)

Winged Fantasy said...

@aas: I navigated to your blog through Kazarelth's and loved it. What you wrote about your grandparents touched a chord somewhere.
I am comparitively new to blogosphere... been about 4 months now. And I have already grown so close to this place and the people... yes It means a lot. :-)

When I said everything fades into oblivion with time, be it love, hate or pain, I meant every feeling loses the touch of reality and just lingers in your sub-conscious like a dream. You cannot recall the details...what remains is just the awareness that you had a dream. :-)

@Sandeep: Hi Sandeep. Thanks a lot... and welcome here. :-)

@Prince Kazarelth: hahahaha... the change is positive then. A 'hopeless romantic' has the promise of being a romantic always... so life will always be beautiful... you will find romance in everything, because it is inside you. ;-)

@aakash!!!: Aisi gustakhi hum kaise kar sakte hain ustaad...

A master shall be a master
In Skill or in Grace...
Amidst the bunch of wordly-trash,
His each syllable, An Ace.

:-)

Caladrius said...

well this one' particularly good, i saw a free-flowing--story-telling poetry after a long time .. hard to find in blogosphere - this type of storytelling poetic style.. you make for an awesome poet .. though i don't know about poetry in general or storytelling poetry in particular, the fact that i still found it very interesting means, i assume, that it certainly had a mass appeal to it. people with a refined taste in poems would appreciate the nuances, but i liked the gist.

Winged Fantasy said...

@sushant: Thank you buddy. My little pieces of poems here are for normal people like us to read and identify with... there is nothing in them to suit the refined tastes of literary critics really. So aap logon ne padha... toh purpose met. :-)

Prince K. said...

I hope I do!
It is quite irritating when you try to explain things to people in the 'romantic' way.

Bah.

***

Yea. Similar to what I felt. I had to write something down, and disguise it somehow, as well...
"Wuthering Heights"?
Thank you

Amandeep Singh said...

Well well..I never thought about love and praise...in this manner...
Beautiful....
Rational...
Strenghth..
vulnerability..
Well I am short of words to describe how I feel after reading this..

:) You write so well

Kudos.....Minakshi!

Anonymous said...

Words are as beautiful as your heart...awesome work!!

Keep it up

Winged Fantasy said...

@Kazarelth: Oh but why even bother explaining? Romantics live in their own world... don't they? ;-)

@Standbymind: Thank you Aman. And isn't that how things are most of the times... in extremes. This is just the middle way out. :-)

@anonymous: Is this who I think it is? Thanks Anju... if it is you. Or... I am sorry. :-)

Cheers!
Meenakshi

Ravali said...

meenakshi, i don't need to tell you how or why i liked this post. as long as you had fun writing it. no more comments or praises needed.

Prince K. said...

Aye. Romantics do live in their own parallel universe.
And so do I. Only it's called "Fealdamar", and pecularly for a parallele dimension, it's a forest! :D

***

Thank you. I do not know why, but it made me feel good. I don't want comments about how well my writings are. Only that you, the Reader, have understood what I have incoherently written.

Unknown said...

Gr888 exploitation of words and amazing narrartiomn power u have surely a hidden talent of publosh writer

Anonymous said...

Simply amazing...:)

Winged Fantasy said...

@ravali: oh yes I had fun writing it... lots of fun. But I hope I can finish it. Thanks ravali. :-)

@Prince Kazarelth: Yeah... romantics also tend to be closer to nature. So a forest is not too surprising an abode for you Kazarelth. ;-)

@Protegeoflife: Yes protege... in love we tend to exploit and get exploited and my love for each written word, probably made it possible that the words do not mind a bit of exploitation at my hands. ;-) hahahaha... kidding.
But more seriously... thanks buddy. :-)

@anonymous: Thanks. But who is this? I am curious... I guessed the first anon... but this one I can't. The words sound familiar, but they are too common a usage to be sure. Please anon leave a signature (even if fake) or any indication next time of who you are. Thanks for visiting anyway.
:-)

Puneet said...

Ai-la ....
Kya mast likha hai ....Bole to JHAKAS
Now I can say for you M(a)inaksh(an)i...
its just like a cool breeze flow through..through ..it touches you it leaves you again touches you and leaves you ..you just enjoy each n every milliseconds of that...and suddenly you reach to the end of your poem...unfair....
Superb....
keep it up....

Winged Fantasy said...

@Puneet: bole toh beedu... yeh apun ka ishtyle hai kya...
Thanks Puneet. :-)