Wednesday, May 16, 2007

Creating Nirjhira- part 1

Hi everybody, I am posting a part of what I had posted earlier, to maintain the flow. This is the completed part-1. Cheers!

Scene-1

It was a bright starlit night.
The queen of the sky, in her crescent chariot, bedecked in the grandeur of white brilliance, presided over the revelry of the night. She smiled graciously at the performance of her ardent admirers, the prim and prop, well dressed, knights of the night, who well portrayed their skills at the art of chivalry, to amuse the queen.

While this act was brewing up in the heavens, on the surface of earth sat a solitary soul by his window… romancing with the cool breeze, wearing a smile indicative of his lost countenance… a silent spectator to the night’s frolics. The very image of a man, freshly struck by Cupid’s arrows… gazing at the moon, possibly summoning in his mind, lines from love sonnets of Sidney and Spenser… comparing his beloved with the moon. By his window he sat, lost in recollecting every moment of that evening when he had met her. And like all those romantic, passionate hearts that believe in “Love at first sight”, our dear young friend, lost his heart to this beautiful maiden at the party. Just like the hero of all classic love stories, every night, he stares at the moon, like it was a mirror reflecting his thoughts in images, and in that image, he sees his beloved’s face. Thus the queen of the sky once again became the patron of yet another pair of lovers. Today, in an especially gracious disposition, she dismisses her court early and sits in solitude with the lover, both admiring in verbal abundance, the object of his passionate love. But our hero is still a rational lover… now does that sound like an oxymoron? Can love and rationale go together? Well I say so, because this gentleman, warrants moderation in his praise for his lady. See what he tells the moon…


Lover:
No… not so high…
Let her be firmly grounded,
for she fears to fly.

No… not so deep…
Let her be perceived shallow,
than plunge in fair conceit.

Oh! not even so fair…
She’s but the colour of dusk,
Dark nights form her hair.
Her eyes are not coral blue,
But a dark brown affair.

Her temperance?
How do I tell you what it be,
Sometimes, a dormant volcano,
Sometimes, a tempestuous sea.

If coquetry be a maid’s weapon,
She has brandished none,
And yet against her natural charms,
All men and deities summon.

If women feign innocence,
To win the hearts of men,
She feigns a fake cunning,
I know not to what gain?

Timidity, fragility and subservience
Are traits to her unknown.
She possesses a tender heart,
With a mind of her own.

She is not a noted beauty,
Nor has any craft conjured…
In her strength and vulnerability
I find my heart conquered.

Moon:
Bravo! Bravo Young heart!
With each syllable you utter
drips a part of your heart…

Love melts in your words,
Making your voice hoarse…
But such are the ways of love
It must take its own course.

But tell me, does she know?
This so desirable an affliction,
does her countenance show?

Aah! do not hesitate bud…
To speak your heart…
Do not in the least fret
the nature of her retort.

I have been a witness
To many love legends,
And seen many crumble
Under mere fake pretence.

Denial my friend, is an agreeable offence.
Submit to your fate, but only at will’s end.
Let not the heart be turned to lead,
By a few words wanted, left unsaid.

And thus the moon pronounced the woe of many lovers… the tale of broken hearts, of love unrequited. But no… our friend is a man of courage, not easily dithered in his decision. With dawn shall he pledge, his heart love-laden, to his beloved maiden. While the moon and this man did plot the plan… in another corner of the city conspired another man. Now this other man turning out to be, the father of the bride-to-be, is a matter of sheer coincidence. And his conspiracy should concern the subject of her wedding, is again err… providence? hmmmm… Do I smell trouble? lets wait and watch…

------------ end of scene-1 --------------------

18 comments:

The Devil's Paradise....... said...

brilliant.... of ll the blogs i ahve traversed thru and al the posts i have read ... this one is among the best i ahve read....
brillint rendition...
loved the way moon speaks
Bravo! Bravo Young heart!
With each syllable you utter
drips a part of your heart…...

i have a blog of my own... might not be as brilliant as u write... but feel free to comment.....
www.intendedpun.blogspot.com

** hope u dint mind me commenting...**

Impressionist said...

YAY!! Meenakshi's back!!!
**PUNCHES FIST INTO THE AIR WITH TRIUMPH**
WOW!!
:| this is simply outta this world!
never knew u wrote dramas also.
This is so wonderfully written **SNIFF**
I want more(Demanding Finger)

peace & love
JeeVY

Pallav said...

beautiful poetry....I can not choose a few lines over the others to show how much I like this....too great...

*bows*

Good one!

N

Anonymous said...

that was just sooooooooooooo beautiful!!!!!!1brilliant!! i dont know what to say!! You write so beautifulllyy!!! after a longtime, I am reading such a good and great and differnt post!!!!!!!!!

i am having a stupid headache,and had come here in the morning to read ur post,but since readin it with a headache wudnt do justice to your post, I didnt! but even right now I have it, and as I read it, I was taken to some other realm, and somewhere in the background I could hear the moon, the lover ,yeah even the father ;)!

i know i talk alot ;),never mind...
so you are back right? the 'stagnation' gone I hope!
Tata!TAkecare!!

Aruni RC said...

...And we were talking about plays...

Must say you've seen a wide selection of what the stage has to offer. The stage always has a life of it's own, the here and the now; as opposed to the canning process on-screen.

I remember the time you had posted this earlier. That was the first post of yours I'd had the fortune of reading. And well, I've been traipsing by ever since. Really looking forward to the next bit. I am smelling trouble, what with the sagacious moon!
And your comments, long or short, are always welcome. You can write for a gigabyte - it's free, right??

Anonymous said...

just too gud..

Anonymous said...

She is not a noted beauty,
Nor has any craft conjured…
In her strength and vulnerability
I find my heart conquered....

thats my love.. albeit a lost one..
mere words of mine cant do justice to the beauty that you have created...
the simplicity is profound, yet it is so gorgeous and visually stirring...
poetry in all its majesty... lady, I bow before you...cheers...
let me soak it into my soul..

Anonymous said...

wld like to dedicate to u few of verses of my poem

Thodi pyaasi koshish, kabhi boondein to kabhi zaare

Is aur se us aur, tarzumaan yeh dil

Lafz nahi hai par nazme hai aahe

____________

ur poetry is too good..a night dream of lover..where he dances in his own solitude..
lovely...kaha the aap!!!

Winged Fantasy said...

@devil's paradise: Hi there. thanks a lot :-)
I visited your blog and the post about the current news scenario is hilarious. Keep Writing and keep visiting. Cheers!

@Rajeev: hahahahahaha... Jeevy you are damn funny. :-)
Arre naaa... I have never written a drama. This was my first attempt. :-) And thank you. the remaining parts will come one after the other.

@Nothingman: Hey thank you very much. :-) [takes a gracious bow]Cheers!

@shammu: Hey hope your headache is okay now dear. Do take care... and what are you doing in front of the PC when down with a headache? Go take rest. :-)
And thank you for the warm words. Stagnation is not over yet. This was written sometime back. :-)

@aruni: I love plays and I like movies too. But yes Plays are far more challenging and involve you a little more, sometimes those characters just arrest your gaze and you cant move. That seldom happens with cinema. But yeah both are great art forms in their own way. :-)
heheheheh... Hope I weave the trouble soon. Let all the evil powers bless me with the trouble making. :-)

@anonymous: thanks anon... but who are you? do leave back a signature next time. anon comments stir my mind a little too much. :-)

@ss: Simon love is always what you make it out to be... the feeling or the person. :-)
Oh don't embarrass me ss. It just fades like a dust-wind, when I read your poems. They are awesome.

@dream catcher: Oh thank you for the dedication. And those lines are superb. "pyaasi koshish" what an expression... and I am in love with the word Tarzumann... its so musical. :-)
thanks for visiting. :-)

Cheers!
Meenakshi

Indrajit said...

wow !
sheer Victorian touch.
i wish i could have 1/10 th of the skill.
this is simply , what to say,,,,,splendiferous(ah , i got a word!!)
you keep this victorian touch and keep rolling.
chow !

Sharad Mathur said...

wow brilliant.
this is the best of all i have read till now.
amazing post!
sharad

Winged Fantasy said...

@indr's angels: Thank you. Yes Victorian it is... even the language at many instances. And that is not a good sign. :-)

@sharad mathur: Thank you Sharad. :-)

Impressionist said...

yehnahi ho sakthaaa! :((
how can u do this to us!!
We're all lost without u!! :((
we'll miss u! :D
**wink wink**

peace & love
JeeVY

Anonymous said...

hiyaa!

theres no coment link for the post above.. :O
i dont understand Hindi :(, but i think u wil be away for a while eh?
its okie :), take your time
and see ya sooon!

Winged Fantasy said...

@rajeev: hahahahahaha.... you reactions make me laugh out loud always. :-)
shall be back soon.

@shammu:
yeah I had removed the comments options thinking noone wud have anything to say about that.
Oh you have got it without knowing the language. Thats exactly what I said. And I shall be back soon. :-)

Cheers!
Meenakshi

AakASH!!! said...

So when you finish this, we'll compose some jazz and blues. And then we'll stage it. OK?

And did i tell you it was marvellous?

Prince K. said...

I didn't see this?!
*Kazarelth slaps himself*

Beautiful... and so... something!!

Charles Gramlich said...

"Lover" is particularly fine.